1.Original: If we agree to say that school offers us the best book knowledge acquisition then oursociety offers us the best surviving techniques in a hard way.
Revised: If we agree that school offers the best method for the acquisition of book knowledge, thenour society offers us the best method for acquiring common sense or “street smarts”.
Agree to say that表达中式化，只需要agree that即可;the best book knowledge acquisition改为thebest method for the acquisition of book knowledge(学校给我们提供了获取书本知识的最好方法)更为恰当 ，同样后面的the best surviving techniques改为the best method for acquiring common sense,加上street marks(街头智慧)给文章的托福词汇增添色彩。
2.Original: They can spend more time studying education and communication to improve their role asa mother, wife and daughter.
Revised: They can also decide to spend more time studying, education themselves, in order toimprove themselves in their roles as mothers, wives and daughters.
编辑推荐
